Welcome to the End of Summer 2013 writing contest…

Serving 3 sentences?
“Three Consecutive Sentences”
This page is for contest entries. (total, 20)
We are now closed to new entries. Thank you all! ~Jim
How to enter:
Have you read the General Contest Rules? By entering, you agree to abide by those rules, plus any special conditions listed on this page.
Use this page’s Comments section to submit your entry.
(see Directions, farther down this page)
Contest dates and times:
- New entries accepted until Saturday, Sept 21 at 11:59 pm EDT (“midnight”)
- Judging begins on Sunday, 9/22
- We’ll announce contest Winner by Saturday, Sept 28
- Among non-finalists, one random entry will be awarded a $10 bonus prize
- Winner’s submission will be published and featured on this website at that time
Specific Rules for End of Summer Contest 2013:
- This contest is for ALL WRITERS
- FIRST ENTRY IS FREE for site subscribers
- Contestants may choose to add one extra paid entry (see below)
- Submit your 3 sentences as your entry (properly punctuated, no word limit)
- You must own full copyright to your submission. Prior publication is fine.
- SoWrite reserves the right to edit entries if necessary (see General Rules)
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- Use the Speak Your Mind box for your entry (at end of this page)
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- Type, or copy and paste your 3 Sentences into the Comment Box (plain text)
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- Proofread, then Click on the green box that says “Post Comment“
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THANK YOU FOR YOUR ENTRY!
»“Jail” graphic by: GSofV
I drove my battered Ford to the edge of the cliff. For a few moments, I watched four buzzards circling something dead far below. I finished my cigarette, put the old truck back in Drive, and pushed the gas pedal to the floor.
Hi Jim, I finally found my way here. LOL
I love your entry, leaves one hanging on that last thought.
Thanks, Olivia! Glad you were able to come over for such a nice, long visit! 🙂
1) For hours Dad sat silent on the front porch after we returned from taking the food Mother had cooked to Jonas Black’s family. My Dad, a southerner who hated all black people, was grieved beyond words when Jonas, the janitor who worked in the furniture store my Dad managed, had been killed on the street by two black teenagers, who then stole $5.00 from Jonas’s pocket. When we arrived that afternoon at the small white house, Jonas’s whole family–his children, grandchildren, sisters, and brothers–ushered us into the house as if we were royalty, and Jonas’s wife told us all about how much Jonas loved my dad–he was just an old black man who swept up the floor, but he loved my dad, and my dad, who hated all black people, sat on our front porch and wept.
Thanks for being our very first contestant, Jewel!
How very poignant a piece. great visuals too. Well done Jewel.
Beautiful story.
2) Jordan wavered, his foot hovered mid-air as he pressed against the brick wall, he took a deep breath, leaned forward and then abruptly stopped to listen to the new voice in his head that told him to stop. He inched to his right, squatted on the window sill hunched forward, his head rested in his hands, his eyes wide as his brain reeled at the flurry of memories as they flooded by. Jordan tipped backwards as arms grabbed him from behind and pulled.
Great to see you here, Cyber. Thanks for your entry!
Jordan, never thought that so few words could tell so interesting a story. opens a door or a window to a greater story.
3) “The contest, oh the challenge”, she thought and pulled the worn thesaurus out of her bag, perusing each page in a frantic search for glittering adjectives and sparkling adverbs to dazzle and delight the judges. The people in the coffee shop thought she was insane as she carefully enunciated each astonishing sentence over and over until the words became radiant phrases of lyrical music. Satisfied that the prize was firmly in her grasp, she cut and pasted the entry into the comments on So Write.US and leaned back in her chair, waiting for the $20.00 prize to appear in her PayPal account.
Ahh, we have a humorist in our midst. Thanks for making me laugh this morning!
very cool entry!
Wordstock – I found this to be entertaining and realistically written. I’m awarding you Wormhole Electric’s Fantasy Collection.
Thank you for participating in the contest!
Carolyn Varvel
I forgot to add the links: The Fantasy Collection is at: http://www.amazon.com/dp/B00BGUHN8U
Wow Carolyn, Thanks! I love SciFi and short stories and it will give me something new and exciting to read at the seemingly endless baseball practices.
This post needs a “like” button – cute!
Gotta love it even though. LOL
Great Job Ann !!! Congratulations 🙂
Congratulations!! Great entry!
4) My Daddy decided that being tossed over a fence into a swamp was an insult, so being smaller than runty and hopping mad, he hurled a line of impolite and ornery invectives back over the wire instead, a descriptive diatribe not fit for moonshine-runners gambling out behind Shenanigan’s pub at 2:00am.
“Git now,” -and don’t be botherin’ me again.”
Hog Johnson laughed and turned away, then grinning widely, showing all three front teeth gone on vacation he said quietly, “maybe now you’ll remember I don’t do fences, and kindly say hello to that pretty little wife of yours”.
Great to have you here as a contestant again, Raymond!
Love this – very “southern,” which is why I’m giving you your choice of any of my three Cedar Hollow Series novels (Appalachian Justice, Return to Crutcher Mountain, or Entangled Thorns). You can find more about them here: https://www.smashwords.com/profile/view/melindarclayton
Raymond, I love you can create a whole scene through dialogue! It is a gift!
Carolyn
Youthful adventure in local pub, more like a rite of passage for a lucky young man LOL
thinking you write from a deep well my friend. LOL
5) With his handsome smile and his tailored suit, he asked her out to dinner at the best restaurant in town that evening. His diamond pinkie ring flashed in the moonlight as he gave her a bouquet of perfect red roses. Upon opening the menu, he asked the fatal question, “So, you’d like a sandwich?”
Welcome, Aura. Now you’ve made me hungry! 🙂
I’m glad, as long as it isn’t for a sandwich! (btw this was based on a real first, and last, date I had)
Aura, I found this to be well told, clear and so true! Thank you.
Carolyn
Funny! I once had a boyfriend who always asked me to get the cheapest thing on the menu…but I digress….;-)
Funny, can only imagine the look on her face. What she wants roses and food too ?? LOL
6) “Years ago a ranger came by these parts and was never seen again.” I followed behind the adults who stopped to dig in the rumored spot. A spur was uncovered, and they decided maybe they needed to go do something else.
Great to see your entry here, Eva. Thank you!
You’re welcome. I posted the contest in my writer’s group. My story is based on a true event when I was a child – as best I remember it.
That’s cool, Eva!
Real-life mysteries are fun and spooky.
I’ve now gathered more information from the family thanks to Rebekah Jones’ suggestion. I have a possible name for the ranger from research. This story may be real. With the extra research my cousins and I did online and in discussion through Facebook we gathered information that would put more details on the story. This has been a very interesting process just from the suggestion of this contest. Thanks!
This is very exciting, Eva! Thanks for keeping us posted as you’ve investigated. A real mystery!
If this story turns out to be real, I really hope you’ll write a book about it!
Oh geez there’s got to be more. peeks the imagination.
7) Just prior to the United States involvement in World War II, 20 year old army sergeant, Leonard; a quiet gentle young man standing tall, thin, and lanky at 6’1”, with wavy, coal black hair, deep-set violet blue eyes, long black eyelashes, and a smile that could melt any girls heart; was home in Oklahoma on leave from the army in the summer of 1939, when, one hot, sultry evening, he strolled into a local restaurant for a glass of cold beer and there she was, working behind the bar…Goldie…a gorgeous, feisty, young woman with long, curly dark blond hair, piercing green eyes; who, compared to Leonard, was a shorty just under 5’4”; and to him she looked like a beautiful, priceless little porcelain doll just waiting to be held and treasured and so at that very moment, feeling his body tingling with excitement; his heart pounding so fast and hard he felt as if it would jump out of his chest; he knew he wanted to be the one man to hold her forever and he saw no reason that forever should not start immediately and so he rushed behind the bar and without saying a word, scooped her up in his long arms and carried her out of the restaurant. Goldie’s uncle, the owner of the restaurant, rushed out of the entrance door after them, yelling, “Leonard, put her down this instant because she’s my best worker and I can’t lose her.” Upon hearing Goldie’s uncle yelling, and as was Leonard’s quiet nature, again without saying a word, he dropped Goldie right there on the ground in the red Oklahoma dirt but he knew with all of his heart, mind, and soul this would not be the last time he would see her, hold her, touch her or be with her, but rather, he knew she was the one he’d waited for all of his life, the only one for him, and they would be together always which is exactly what happened just one month later on August 1, 1939, when standing before a justice of the peace, Leonard and Goldie became Mr. and Mrs. Leonard Jones, embarking on a 54-year love affair … a love affair which remained alive in Goldie’s heart even after Leonard’s death in 1993 … a love affair in which they, with God’s help and direction, overcame all of the challenges along with enjoying all of the precious moments in the life they built together as partners; a true and loving team; a life which included traveling over half the world plus becoming parents to three children, the youngest of whom is honored and pleased to share this story – my amazing parent’s story – with you.
Hi Rebekah. When you enter a contest, you really go for it.
You may have set a new record for word count. Very interesting entry, thanks!
Thanks Jim! lol It needs major editing. 🙂 My parents anniversary would have been last month…guess they’ve really been on my mind a lot.
btw…100% true story 🙂
LOL, props to you for telling an entire story in three of the longest, most well-written sentences I’ve read! 🙂
Thanks a bunch! 🙂
Rebekah, You said it, interesting well written adventure.
Thank you1
8) The beautiful smell of the tiny flowers from that tree came smoothly towards my nose that starry night. The smell made me feel so high that I didn’t even notice the claws of the beast going through my bowels. If I’m allowed to say, dying under the stars, full of the smell, was one of the best ways to die that you should try once.
Hey there, Carlos–glad you made an entry. Is this your first time competing, or second? Thanks!
This is my first entry 🙂
Very intriguing!
Though dark, meaningful distractions, and clash of senses makes this most interesting.
Contest ENTRY from Olivia B: (not Jim!)
9) I was of your blood and heartbeat. Yet, torn from your security you gave me up as my silent cry went unanswered. I quivered and let life go as a brief encounter, for I had inconvenienced you.
too sad 🙁
Please note that this is Olivia’s entry, NOT MINE.
For some strange reason, my picture remains on display here despite my best efforts to remove it. Sorry about that, Olivia. For one thing, you’re much better-looking than I am! 🙂
Why thank you dear friend LOL
Wow…..just….wow
This is powerful.
Welcome, Julie! Thanks for your feedback on Olivia’s entry.
Even though this is sad, you’ve provided an amazingly touching, emotional story.
Good luck in the competition.
Thank you so much CVarvel 🙂
Congratulations, Olivia – loved your entry, very poignant, very succinct. You WON your choice of any of RHP’s books, Kindle, Kobo, Nook, or print! Just check our website, http://www.RockingHorsePublishing.com and let me know which you prefer!
Thank you so much Robin. I am so very flattered.
Robin, I would like a Kindle copy of “Reduced ”
Thank you, Olivia
Sure thing, just send me your email addy! And thanks – wow, out of all them? 🙂
10) “So, you’re back,” she said, offering her perfumed cheek for a kiss.
“Yes,” he said, his suitcase leaning against his leg like a protective dog, “and did you miss me?”
She sighed as the dull voice came over the speakers heralding his departure, “You can’t miss what you never had.”
Welcome back, Tammy!
Tammy leads our local writers’ group, and has served as a contest judge in the past. Fun to have you join us as a contestant this time, Tammy.
There’s a lot in these little sentences. I can imagine standing there at the airport watching this scene.
You are still one of the great wordsmiths, Tamara! Good luck!
Carolyn
Mysterious….
Amazingly reading these words is like picking up where you left off with a friend. Well done.
comment not an entry: I’m really enjoying reading the entries! I want to read the “rest” of the stories! Please let me know about any articles or books that come from this contest. 🙂
Thanks for your feedback, Rebekah.
Since this contest does not conceal our writers’ identities, I encourage contestants to comment if they want to. Our judges will wait to make any comments until after the Sept 21 deadline.
Since this is not a popularity contest, you won’t be influencing the competition’s results if you do decide to leave feedback for other writers. Glad you are enjoying these wonderful entries, Rebekah!
Rebekah, I had not thought of making an entire story out of the short event. It was based on a true story from my childhood at my Grandparents’. They lived on the last house on a gravel road in Louisiana. I asked my mom about the story. She knew the rumor of the ranger, but did not know about the adults who did the digging. I would have to do some fast interviewing as all of my aunts and uncles that are still living are old.
My parents and all of my uncles and aunts on both sides of the families are deceased. Growing up I heard my parents (mostly my mom) tell their stories but I only have bits and pieces of the rest of the family. Everyone was spread out across the country. Since you still have family living, Eva, my suggestion to you is…get busy, girl!!
I have asked about some stories. However, this is one I had forgotten about until I wrote it for this post. My dad died when I was a teenager, and one uncle died two years ago. Several aunts have also died. My dad came from a large family. I did, however, ask my cousins on a post in Facebook to see if they knew of this story.
If I can’t find out the details, I guess I could, um, work on my writing – ha!
Thanks for your suggestion Rebekah. Through talking with my cousins on Facebook I now have more details. With those details we did research online and have a real name of a real ranger who “disappeared” while undercover around the right timeframe working on something that fit with the rest of the story. It also got my first cousins and I talking about a family story before it disappeared.
VERY COOL!!! Let me know when the book is published! 🙂
Hi Contestants,
I just gave away three extra free entries to writers who replied to the Contest Announcement comments section.
Are you subscribed to that page’s comments? You never know what’s going to happen there! 🙂
(all you have to do is leave a short comment, and click on “Notify me of follow-up comments by email”)
11) He stood wearily on the edge of tomorrow, with opposing forces weighing heavily on his mind. With some wounded and barely visible pride, he did what humble and wise men in the past have done. He slowly and reluctantly fell to his knees.
Thank you for your second entry, Olivia!
I can so relate to this. Beautiful three sentences.
Ooh, I like this! Very dark (I write dark ;-)). I’d love to give you a coupon for one of my three Cedar Hollow Series novels – Appalachian Justice, Return to Crutcher Mountain, or Entangled Thorns. You can learn more about them here: https://www.smashwords.com/profile/view/melindarclayton
Thank you so much Melinda. Your site is so impressive. I would appreciate a coupon for any of your novels. Thank you again. olivia
12) The neighbor
Of all the people who lived on her street, none noticed her more than the drunk who owned a 19-foot reticulated python, which he proudly wore around his neck one late afternoon while swaying unsteadily, face redder than usual, on the sidewalk in front of his house.
His fury knew no bounds when she drove by behind those big, black sunglasses as if she hadn’t noticed him and didn’t care for him and, as the light began to fade into swirls of purple and deep blue, he stumbled to her house, took a deep breath, and heaved the snake over her fence, snickering and gasping at the same time before taking another swig from his empty whiskey bottle and screaming.
The ambulance siren howled and the door started to close, but she leaned in, found his wheeling eyes, took off her sunglasses, and said, “I’m sorry, I… I don’t know your name, and I’m sorry about your snake and the Taser, but Animal Control says she has a good chance of recovery though you won’t be able to keep her, and, well, you take care now, ‘kay?”
Not sure how the question mark landed at the end of the first sentence! 🙂
All fixed, Leah.
Writers, if you need a typo fixed, please don’t hesitate to ask. We don’t want to penalize good writing for errors you had never intended.
Thanks Jim! I must have brushed a finger against the question mark key or something while posting.
Welcome, Leah! You certainly know how to get the most out of your sentences. 🙂
Thanks–took me awhile to whittle all that down. Short-shorts are great practice for word choice! And 3 sentences is great punctuation practice 🙂
If you need help, I know someone who’s a real Punctuation Pro. Oh, wait…nevermind. 🙂
Heh. That restrictive clause in the first sentence had me stymied. (…the drunk who owned…among other drunks? Or should it be non-restrictive? …the drunk, who owned….lol) And the whole thing still needs work *sigh*
Are there any participles in there, Leah? I always wanted one, but I’m never sure if I’ve seen on or not! 🙂
Quite a visual, snake and town drunk. LOL
13) Was this man seriously kneeling in front of her, holding out a sparkling diamond ring as enticement while his other hand enveloped her fingers in what could only be called a vise-like grip and at the same time he was gazing up at her with those sad puppy-dog eyes of his which never ever failed to get him what he truly wanted?
He knew as well as she did that they HATED each other since almost birth and yet, things had changed drastically over the years and now they could barely be apart for more than an hour without something close to withdrawal pains attacking them both.
She pondered this for a moment and seeing the futility of it all, she shrugged saying, “What the heck,” and flung herself into his arms toppling them both onto the dewy grass, and there they stayed holding each other closely, getting quite damp and cold, kissing and laughing like completely insane loons.
Glad you made it, Glory. I know you’ve been busy, but it’s never a contest without you!
Oh yes, I recognize “Glory stories”, romance and love everywhere. ! Great writing my friend 🙂
Jim asks (but we’ve run out of nested reply space) “Are there any participles in there, Leah? I always wanted one, but I’m never sure if I’ve seen one or not! :-)”
Oh, there are a bunch. “Snickering and gasping,” for example. There are even some participial phrases. Woo 🙂
Not like I think of them much. Gives me anxiety attacks that go back to tortuous linguistic classes in which we diagrammed sentences that filled 11×14 sheets of paper while tears rolled down our cheeks :).
“And when we’re all grown up,” we used to ask, “why would we ever need to diagram a sentence??” 🙂
Guess I’m one of the nutty ones 🙂 I loved diagramming sentences!
Hi Rebekah, I like it too, in general, but in college, it was pretty deep…modals, auxiliaries, DPs, MVPs, and all sorts of abbreviations and numbers and all that. Cool stuff but torture for most of us who aren’t that into memorization. Prof was way stuffy on top of it 😀
Hey, I know what MVPs are! (There’s one for every game, on the winning team, right?) 🙂
14) The convenience store is the most reliable business establishment in Japan. Earthquake, typhoon, tsunami – you name it – and it was sure to be the only establishment to remain open during the entire catastrophe. And today, as she felt the incessant urge and desire for alcohol rise up in her throat and throb mercilessly in her brain, today, it was all that she had.
Thanks for your entry, Jennifer! Glad you joined us.
Clever writing, a yearning for comfort during bad times.
15) The record button flashed red. Giddy with anticipation, his sweaty hands nearly slipped as he shifted his weight pumping, pushing, pounding against the grimy bottle while shards of glass popped like birthday balloons as the girl choked on cool wine gurgling with warm blood. Adding a few notes to his thick logbook before proceeding, he was so glad he’d saved the rare wine for someone special.
Wow, PJ, thanks for that lovely image as your entry. I’m not sure how well I’ll sleep tonight now.
PJ: Creepy, just creepy.
I agree to its creepiness. I took a class this summer on the rape culture in the U.S. It was not one of those classes where you can do the work, get the grade and put it away. I’m not claiming I was normal prior to the class. Just sayin’ I could be even less normal now! 🙂
Creepy, yes, but very well told. Good description and character development.
Thanks,
Carolyn
PJ – I keep coming back to this entry – I’d like to offer you a copy of Wormhole Electric’s latest Fantasy Collection.
Carolyn
Did it again! Check out http://www.wormholeelectric.com
Thanks, Carolyn! It sounds fascinating.
PJ
Oh geez I’m spooked now. Well written trip of horror.
16) It rained and rained–no end in sight. As the flood waters inexorably mounted, Nori offered up a heartfelt prayer. “Praise be to God, for making me a fish.”
Hey, Rie–glad you made an entry. I wasn’t sure if you were going to take the plunge. Thanks for your #FF Tweets, too!
Had to ponder. 🙂 May still make another, but now I am intimidated by the beauty of my competition. 😉
This is great. What a surprise ending 🙂
As I’ve been through monumental amounts of rain lately, this struck me so appropriate!
Thanks,
Carolyn
Cleaver and cuteness here. 🙂
17) “Take my mind, and dunk it in the water until it submerges within the stones at the bottom of this stream.” You speak the words to me with a pale face that began depriving itself of oxygen long before we met. As I push you toward the liquid edge, you turn to me and say, “Drink up life, my friend, or the day will come when you too will long for the stones to call an end to your wasteful life.”
Welcome, Christy! Thanks for adding to the bright and cheery atmosphere here among our entries. 🙂
Wow, this is very poetic!
Melinda, I mainly write poetry so that is great that the wording shows up that way 🙂 Thanks!
Awesome! My sister is a poet – I must have picked up on something somewhere! Great job. 🙂
A taste of the good life, a rebirth. Well done.
18) 2nd Entry:
The limitless reaches of space surrounded them–spangled with uncountable stars. “I am so glad we got to share this moment,” he said, taking her hand. “Me too,” she whispered, as she hit the button to jettison the hatch.
Welcome back, Rie. Looks like you finished pondering just fine. 😉
This one definitely makes me wonder – suicide pact? Part of the mission? Hmmm….:-)
Have they arrived in space together ? I see another story on its way.
19) They were ardent lovers bound to secrecy, fellow musicians, and passionate poets who hadn’t seen or spoken to one another in over three decades.
Heartbreaking circumstances kept them apart until romantic desire that never waned over the passage of time and The Almighty Universe intervened and prompted him to email her.
Serendipity prevailed and they are, at long last, happily reunited in a partnership destined for success, joy, and boundless love.
Great to see your entry here in time, Melanie. Thanks for your help with contest promo. So, your entry–true story or plain fiction? (You don’t have to answer that!)
True story, Jim! And I’m living it as we speak. 🙂
How cool is that?
Well, my friend, it’s pretty doggone COOL. 😉
An ongoing love affair, you gotta love it .:)
20) When I saw Caroline Anderson’s mother in the grocery store, I ducked behind the tallest family I could find and followed them around the corner at the end of the pickle aisle. “I see you still love Oreo’s,” she said, when she found me later staring blankly at the blue and white packages, remembering the summer when we ate dozens of them in her tree house, bribing her little brother with the leftovers to leave us alone. “Please come visit any time, honey, because no matter how long she’s been gone, you will always be Caroline’s best friend.”
Hey there, Mary ~ so glad you made it before the deadline! You’ve entered a previous contest, too, haven’t you?
Thanks, Jim, what a great contest!! I love reading all the entries.
Great to see you’ve won a digital prize here, Mary.
I’ll contact you, and all of our book winners, by email with details for claiming your prize.
This has me dying to know what happened! I’d love to give you a coupon code for one of my three Cedar Hollow Series novels (Appalachian Justice, Return to Crutcher Mountain, or Entangled Thorns). You can find out more about them here: https://www.smashwords.com/profile/view/melindarclayton
Interesting, like a chapter from a good book. can’t wait to turn the page.
Wow, fantastic entries Jim, a great contest! “:)
Thanks, Raymond!
I agree. I’m blown away to by the wide diversity among our writers here.
This comment marks the end of our entries. Thank you, everyone!
Now that the contest deadline has passed, judges and contestants alike are encouraged to provide feedback to our contestants’ entries.
Our judges will be awarding their digital book prizes by replying to individual entries. Stay tuned!
Hi Jim,
Wow, first I couldn’t get on this site and then, I couldn’t get off LOL
Interesting and fun. Thanks for the invitation to take part in it.
All I can say is …
WOWZERS!! Way cool entries, everyone. What a great community this is. 🙂
Thanks very much, Melanie.
I love the part where our contestants start getting more feedback and winning prizes. I also love it when people say “WOWZERS!!” — always makes me smile! 🙂
How lucky am I LOL rsashab@yahoo.com
I want to thank the judges and Jim for choosing my 3 sentences. It was quite a shock especially when you read the other entries. I mentioned to Jim that if I had read the other 3 sentences before I posted mine, I would not have submitted it at all. I am feeling humbled by the talent and creativity of the other entries.
Congratulations, Ann!
The judges loved your entry, so I’m very glad you did enter this one. I’ve sent you an additional message via email, too.